i finished the redit for dark heroes. the editor sent it to me yesterday.
thank goodness, i read very fast.
the writing must have improved, most of the need calrity commetns were in the upper half, and the parts i wrote later needed much less work. amazing how a good editor can help. this is why i am starting in romance.they will publish and teach, unlike print books,that are so hard to break into. i still i want ot do print, someday, and now i feel like i can get there someday.
i loked over the sci fi comedy, and i just don't know. there's not enoguh sex, i think, but maybe its still good becuase it's funny. i think i need to improve it, and in the meantime, i'm writing like three differnt books and eager to finish those becuase i can think of at least tow others i want to do.
my typing speed has improved, too.
so for all you want to be romance writers, looking to learn romance writing, or wanting to improve erotica writng, try try and try. get published if you can, and thank your editor for teaching you. really try to learn. my editor request a whole re write, and when i told her i wnated to improve, she started adding extra comments so i could see what i was doing wrong.

i went to starbucks and spent an hour just plodding thourgh a chapter of the paranromal suburban story. then, i decided to switch books. when i was scrolling around on my alphasmart, i saw a chapter of the thief story.i started writing, and it took off. i spentan hour typing fast, daydreaming less.
so who cares, if you are a want to be romance writer? or erotica writer?
becuase every author, i think, hits the sam ething. not writer's block, but a slow down. here's where it's fun to be writing more than one story.
the problem?
each character needs to be differnt, and when skipping around, it can be hard to remember if this character would say that, or not.
a good writer is trapped byt hier fiction. your story has to be logical, no matter how magical. and your characters can't break character. it's obvious when you have an sterotype. harder when you have a sublte character. spiderman. he's not quite a sterotype, thought he nerdy book worm turned super hero is becoming one. he's differnt from batman or superman or wonder woman. batman is dark, and known to break bones in modern comics. superman is a man of honor, who is smart to never lie, yet gets caugth inemotional diffculties he can barely understand. yes, i read comic books. the writing has to be intenser to keep younger minds paying attention. and yet, the books are good enough adults read them too. batman doesn't suddenly become a big pile of gooey mush over a pretty women. nor does superman start lying, or give his id away voer nothing. characters. the plot bends aroudnt hem, want to be erotica writer, not the other way around.

i'm lazy. after pushing myself to finish dark heroes i have taken a few days off from writing. the nice thing, now that i have made an effort to write every day before the last big re write and after the big re write, i now notice that it has been a few days since i have written anything.
i'll get back to writing in a day or so. i have the suburban paranrormal, the castle story, and a new one i was thinking of, but have nothing done except a few notes.
i heard back from the editor, it will be about a week before she is done. so that's not to long of a wait to hear how bad/good it is. hopefully we already did the bad and now were into the good.
check out this sentence.
no wonder he offered to walk her home. her shirt was ripped to her stomach. a free peep show to the creeps of the world.
the editor didn't understand why she was callinghim a creep whenhe had jsut saved her. was this too vague? the creep part refers to everyone she would have met on the way home, and he saw it, and offered to walk her home. he's protecting her, not being called a creep.
but remember.
YOU WANT YOUR READERS TO THINK ONLY WHAT YOU WANT THEM TO THINK.
if the editor was confused, areader could be, andhere is where you lose them. inthe maze of perfectly clear sentence that are not understood. and then the reader remembers they didn't like your book. the last book, and never again buy your work, even though you shown massive improvment.
every book needs tobe as good as you can at the moment, and keep improving. you might get a second chance at those readers that didn't like your earlier work.

i just sent off the 'hope to God it's the final' final version of dark heroes for the last, i hope last, re edit. now, i wait to hear back from my wonderful/frustating editor.
there are three new lines in it.
they comes from another blog, well known for sexy humor, or just plain fun. their friday video of 'total eclipse of the heart' was just freaking hilarious.
run, your vagina is haunted.
shaved the bush to make the tree look talled is in there too.
for some reason, this dark book came out with a lot of light humor in it.
still, anything that makes people like a book is good, right? so i emailed the blog and told them i used the lines. we'll see if they read the comments.
but in the meantime,
yippee!
done with dark heroes for a while!
back to typing out the next disater to need major reedits before being published. yeah.
i think i started like three books at least since that one was accepted. at least. now, i need to finish at least one past a mid way point and it might get finished, unless i totally re do the sci fi comedy to meet their standards. or do the usual, and do both, a new write and a re edit. becuase one thing is just too simple to finish, no, i have to make work for myself.
ps. they also spell the word the as "teh." yeah, typing dyslexics untie. or whatever.

i'm up to 140 out of 151 on the re edit. i hope this is it. the editior should lookit over, point out the mistakes and send it back.
interestingly, i just came across this line.
her heart fluttered and slammed in her chest.
now i know, my editor would be saying her heart can't flutter and slam at the same time.
why?
because i had a line where the hero is floating in mid air out her window, his cloak flapping like hands clapping. she told me (i'm guessing proconsuls is a woman, for no reason whatsoever) that if he is floating his cloak isn't flapping, though she liked the line.
i gotta admit, i caught that line the first time i read it. so who is right? how much creative writing can an author do without alienating readers?
it's hard to say, and note the focus of that question. it's not about art, or rules, it's about the reader. who is buying the book. who ultimatly decide the sucess or failure of the book.
you could be the next shakespeare, and ifno one buys your book, good luck getting published again. you could be a horrbile writer, and if people like the book, you've got it made. look at all the hack writers on the NY best selling list. most of them are great, but every so often there's one who makes you wonder how they got published.

today i asked the posting authors of whispers which is better" a blog or a website?
i found whispers though a blog called elf killing and other hobbies. but i love the website of jennifer estep. she also writes books about super heroes and her website has buildings that move and little interactive things. i could never afford a website like that. especially not with being an ebook writer.
my last novel, forbidden passion, made eigth bucks.
yep. eight whole big ones. long live the economy. yah, ebook from a first time writer.
i am still going over dark heroes, and as much as i have put into this book it had better sell more.
i think the writing has improved, but it's hard to say.
hopefully within a few books i'll be good enough to write print novels, and then the bucks will really start rolling in. maybe even into the three digits. whoopee.
okay, i'm being bitter. poverty sucks.
but at least i was published, and whispers is willing, despite low sales, to publish another book. and it is very good practice. every author goes through this i hate my book thing.
just read the foreword of many modern books. a lot of work goes into first time novels, and mine are sadly no exception.
the good news is i'm one third of the way through the edit. the bad news is i am one third of the way through the edit. it took me two hours last night, so i figure if i chug pop at work i might be able to put in enough late nights when i get home to finish the edit by sometime next week.

i had plans to redo the sci fi funny with whathername being his one true love. now, i have to finish this book re edit. then, i still need to work on the homeless suburban paranormal, and the castle story.
i gotta admit, i like having so many ideas. now if a idea doesn't work out i have so many others to try and get done before the next big re edit.

going through the old posts i see that i have mentioned doing the same re writes. this blog is a great way to reveal what a lazy ass I am. and it's not big fish games fault, i just need to crack down. i have been writing a bit before the job, not every day, but trotting along pretty well.
I think the sci fi comedy will be redone so that she is his love, as fits in with whispers new policy. i hope i can finish it within a months or so. the only problem is rewrites are done at home, and new books are done at starbucks or elsewhere.
i might be able to work on it at night.
whispers has a newsletter coming out that might have contests in it. i'm going to suggest they check out blogs for prizes since no one ever reads mine.
of course, havinga life to talk about might help. i could offer a penny for every typo spotted but i would soon be broke.
i just finished the heart shaped box, by Joe Hill. pretty spooky. the ghost had a lot of power, but enough to be subtle. over all, it was an excellent book. the scene where he sees the little girl in the back yard gave me goosebumps. the book starts fast enough and keeps going strong. this is a must read for horror fans. though the main character might have been cliche being a rocker with a dark streak his girlfriends where not. and really, the main character was interesting enough i don't care if maybe rocker with a drama past has been done before. this was well worth the money i spent on it.
or would have spent, but i have border bucks from a survey site. i buy newbooks every month or so, fifteen dollars worth. there's no reward for recommending people but i might toss up a link to them anyway, as i love sharing free reads.