the sci fi novel is coming great. every so often there's bad writing, but then i hit another funny spot. so far i'm liking the novel better than any of the others.
then, there's sentences like this.
he rolled his head over to make sure it still worked.
the character has bad luck, and is turning his head to the side to see if the clock is still working. but that's not what's said, is it?
pay attention, you want-to-be erotica writers, and romance want-to-be writers.
you want to your readers to think only what you want them to think.
YOU WANT YOUR READERS TO THINK ONLY WHAT YOU WANT THEM TO THINK.
so, i'm thinking of prince chad, the character, removing his head and rolling it on a pillow to see if it works. that's what the reader thinks, and is totally distracted, by, um, from, the thingy....
and there's goes your future career as a writer.
still haven't heard back from whispers.
A> it socks so bad the editor is afraid to tell me, and is hiding behind a desk hoping it will all just go away,
B> they're busy reading it
C> they're busy cutting checks and getting more buyers, and are busy.
eitehr way, (except for a )it's not bad to have to wait.
the suthor driven contest is still up and running. buy the book, read it, write me a review if you didn't like it telling me what i can fix, or what youw ould like to see, and if it makes me a better writer, you get an entry into a full refund contest.
hurry, soont ehre will be another book replacing forbidden passion.